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Rated: Fiction T
Language: English
Genre: Friendship/Romance
Pairings: Austin T. & Payson K
Chapters: 18
Complete/Incomplete: Complete

Summary--
He doesn't believe in serious relationships anymore. He doesn't believe in settling down. He doesn't believe in commitments. It's all bull shit, as far as he's concerned. Cause he's the Bad Boy of Gymnastics, always was, always will be. But that bad boy crap isn't going to fly at the Tucker Family Reunion. At this point, lying is his only option, once again.

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Rated: Fiction T
Language: English
Genre: Romance/Family
Pairing: Payson K & Austin T.
Complete/Incomplete: Incomplete

Summary--
9 Years Ago the most focused Rock gymnast was the only one who didn't give two shits when the famous Bad Boy of Gymnastics came to train at her gym. That same boy is also the one man to ever capture her heart this much. The irony is almost unreal. But opposites attract and people change, right? Yeah, well, try explaining that to the Keelers. READING ANOTHER TWISTED FAMILY REUNION FIRST IS RECOMMENDED.


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07 April 2012 @ 10:17 pm

The Chance of a Lifetime - Chapter 1

Summary
: Since she was six Payson always dreamt of becoming an elite gymnast and go to the Olympics. However her mother, who worked as a dance teacher, at the 'St Paul Ballet Academy', always wanted for her to become a ballerina. Therefore Payson never really pursued that dream, she merely kept doing gymnastics at a public gym near her house. When her mother suddenly dies in a car accident, Payson is forced to leave Minnesota, where she lived all her life, and going to leave with her uncle and aunt, Mark and Kim Keeler, in Boulder, house of one of the best gymnastic club in the Country and one of the greatest coaches in the world, Sasha Belov. The tragedy that has suddenly hit her thus becomes an unexpected opportunity to make her apparently impossible dream come true.

Pairings: Payson/Sasha.

Alternate Universe. Payson in this story is Mark and Kim's niece. She had never competed at Nationals. She's completely unknown in the Gymnastic World.

Marty trains the Denver Elite Club and Kelly Parker, current National Champion. Kaylie is the second best gymnast in the Country and number one at the Rock. Sasha has been the Rock's coach from two years. Kaylie and Lauren trains at the Rock since they were little. Emily since she was thirteen, three years. The three of them are best friends.

Since this is actually an AU story, the background and events leading to the beginning of this fiction may change, not only regarding Payson but the other characters too. Possible OOC characters. You have been warned!

Disclaimer: I don't own Make it or Break it, nor any of its characters. If I did, Payson and Sasha would be together.

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07 April 2012 @ 10:15 pm

The Chance of a Lifetime - Prologue

Summary
: Since she was six Payson always dreamt of becoming an elite gymnast and go to the Olympics. However her mother, who worked as a dance teacher, at the 'St Paul Ballet Academy', always wanted for her to become a ballerina. Therefore Payson never really pursued that dream, she merely kept doing gymnastics at a public gym near her house. When her mother suddenly dies in a car accident, Payson is forced to leave Minnesota, where she lived all her life, and going to leave with her uncle and aunt, Mark and Kim Keeler, in Boulder, house of one of the best gymnastic club in the Country and one of the greatest coaches in the world, Sasha Belov. The tragedy that has suddenly hit her thus becomes an unexpected opportunity to make her apparently impossible dream come true.

Pairings: Payson/Sasha.

Alternate Universe. Payson in this story is Mark and Kim's niece. She had never competed at Nationals. She's completely unknown in the Gymnastic World.

Marty trains the Denver Elite Club and Kelly Parker, current National Champion. Kaylie is the second best gymnast in the Country and number one at The Rock. Sasha has been the Rock's coach from two years. Kaylie and Lauren trains at the Rock since they were little. Emily since she was thirteen, three years. The three of them are best friends.

Since this is actually an AU story, the background and events leading to the beginning of this fic may change, not only regarding Payson but the other characters too. Possible OOC characters. You have been warned!

Disclaimer: I don't own Make it or Break it, nor any of its characters. If I did, Payson and Sasha would be together.

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10 February 2012 @ 06:22 pm

Title: What It Takes to Be a Champion
Author: esm3rald
Pairing: Payson/Sasha
Rating: R
Word Count: 2021
Spoilers: Season1-Season2
Disclaimer: I don't own Make it or Break it unfortunately...wish I did though!
Summary: What if it was Payson who contacted Sasha to make him come coach at the Rock? and what if her back was already healed by the time Sasha becomes her new coach? Lauren is not a Rock girl in this story, she remains in Denver.


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10 February 2012 @ 06:19 pm

Title: What It Takes to Be a Champion
Author: esm3rald
Pairing: Payson/Sasha
Rating: R
Word Count: 1459
Spoilers: Season1-Season2
Disclaimer: I don't own Make it or Break it unfortunately...wish I did though!
Summary: What if it was Payson who contacted Sasha to make him come coach at the Rock? and what if her back was already healed by the time Sasha becomes her new coach? Lauren is not a Rock girl in this story, she remains in Denver.

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05 July 2011 @ 02:11 am
Title: The Practical Girl
Author: lit_chick08
Pairing: Payson/Sasha
Rating: PG
Word Count: 2450
Spoilers: everything to be safe
Disclaimer: I don't own them nor do I make money from them
Summary: Payson thought everything would get better when Sasha returned, but it isn't so easy to go back
A/N: First “Make It or Break It” fic; feedback and concrit greatly appreciated

Payson Keeler is not a dreamer.
 
 
 
25 April 2011 @ 02:15 am

Title: All Your Eggs in One Basket Case!

Author: Ria Rose

Fandom: Make It Or Break It

Rated: PG for mild language.

Summary: Sasha is feeling a little bitter about the impending holiday.

Genre: Gen with a side of Cute

No Pairings, features primarily Sasha(!) with Kim, Payson, and a quick cameo of Kaylie.

No set timeline, though I’m thinking anywhere in season one. No spoilers that I could catch.

Author’s Notes: This is just a cute little fluffy piece about our favorite coach, because, let’s face it, there’s not enough that focus on him! It’s on the shorter side to what I usually write (Usually 12-15 pages in Word) but it works. I don’t know what the families’ of The Rock has religion wise, so I just went with it. If I’m wrong, whatever. Happy reading! PS: This is my first MIOBI fic though I've been writing since 1997. :)

Though the calender called it "Good Friday," Sasha found he really couldn't agree. )

 

THE END and HAPPY EASTER!


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20 April 2011 @ 12:51 pm

One.

This is madness, what they’re doing.

She should stop this. She knows that.

He cannot stop this. He’s crossed a line--well, leapt over it, really--with her on his back clinging to every inch of bare skin that she could find on his body, and now there is nothing left to do for him but continue.

She should be the one to back away.

After all, she’s the one who started this in the first place.

She

She is the one who hurt him and goaded him into doing this, she is the one who all but forced him into…this.

Yet whatever else happens, she cannot regret this.

Her hands scrape over his back as his teeth nibble holes into her throat that resemble the Sasha-shaped hole he left in her heart when he left her. When she doubts the goodness of this she remembers that he is the one who left her, once upon a time so long ago she thinks he doesn’t even remember it anymore…but she does.

He broke her open and left ash spilling between them, broke her easy as glass, and she fell out of her parents’ once-firm grasp while they were not paying attention. She spread out across the surface of the ocean and disappeared. He had made her into nothing, once.

So when he enters her now with a low sound deep in the back of his gorgeous throat what she feels is triumph.

Two.

She lets him touch her now, lets him kiss her, but everybody knows that she is only out on bail from the prison he keeps her in. She is under lock and key most of the time, now, although to her the chains feel like comfort and their absence reminds her only of how naked she is, how vulnerable, without his hold on her.

She is a tremulous throat, words of love which never quite add up to ‘I love you’ however she tries to make them do and most of all she is curves, curves, curves, hills and valleys exploding out of firm muscle.

Any day now

He understood, and got her a blanket, and made her hot chocolate, and held her while she shook.

That night when she crawled from the prison of her lovely bedroom into his cot, he did not kick her out.

He turned over and wrapped an arm ‘round her shoulders, pressed a kiss to her temples, and held her close.

Three.

She is not trying to save face.

She knows everyone thinks that she is. She loved him once, ergo she must again, and never mind the new wrinkles dotting his face, or the fact that he returned to them looking as though he had not slept in months.

Never mind his now more obvious courting of Summer, his carefully timed brushes against Summer’s back.

Never mind the way he refuses to look at her in the gym.

When he is with her in the night, when she refuses to leave with the rest simply for the promise of a few moments alone with him, that’s when she knows why do this, why strive so hard for something that can only occupy so little of her time, why for that matter go on breathing at all in a world in which he cannot be hers out loud the way he deserves to be and the way he assures her in the night that she deserves for him to be. When she arches back her head into his small kisses dotting her throat she thinks small is enough.

For her, for them, for now, small is perfect.

Four.

From this point on, we will either find or lose our souls

He whispers the words into her body, buries them beneath her collarbone as he makes her skin feel like skin again, rather than the organ she’s always dismissed as being mere protection for the muscles she adores.

He is enamored with her skin, and that may be the best possible advertisement for the lotion she has taken to smoothing on at night for the first time since ever.

 

Five.

Sasha did not have a favorite gymnast, but if he did, it would be her.

Sasha did not fall in love with the gymnasts he privately thought of as “his”, either…but if he did, she would be without question the one whom he would fall for.

Payson did not fall in love with anybody, ever, but if she had let herself slip up, once, he would have been that one mistake.

Neither of them liked to think that the rumors swirling around their every step were true.

Yet it was becoming more and more clear to everyone who saw them that they did not detest the circulation of these rumors nearly enough to prevent themselves from continuing to work together the way they always had done…which in their case, meant the maximum amount of touching acceptable within the context of working together. Payson had never had cause to doubt that he was being anything but professional towards her, and he intended to keep it that way. Even if it killed him.

Six.

They are on the airplane when he asks: Do you hate me?

The words are rasped out through a dry throat, with a shy whisper over his shoulder at the other women sleeping behind him. Lauren had insisted that Payson be the one to sit next to Sasha, pointing out that if they did have any ‘lovers-type-thingies’ to do they had better do it before competition day.

Payson had resisted initially, but then Sasha heard about her new beam routine and figured that maybe Lauren was right, maybe they should get whatever they needed to get out of the way here and now.

After all, waiting was nearly guaranteed to lead to an impromptu hug before an unforgiving crowd….and while Sasha had made his career out of not caring what anybody else thought of him, he cared a great deal about what that same crowd thought of Payson. For reasons which had nothing to do with the fact that she still smelled like the old Payson, with some lavendar added for effect, or so he assumed.

Nothing at all, and why would it?

Now here she was, peering curiously at him, question marks dancing around her eyes as she considered every possible answer before proceeding--the picture of an over-thinker, and the perfect balance to his severely compromised thought process, or so his father was sure, anyway. His perfect match…

Payson turned cool blue eyes his way and he gulped at the answer they held before she said it: Yes.

He turns away from her, unwilling to let her see how much he is affected by her, even now: Oh. I see.

She whips out her hand and clasps the wrist closer to her, yanking him back around: No. I don’t know.

Sasha: Payson--

She is babbling and looking away from him even as he strives to meet her eyes: We ran into Kelly Parker at the Denver Meet and she, well, she said some things, which I know is nothing new because she always says things but--she said that you had been my first love and that my heart was broken when you left me.

As his mouth is falling open at her choice of phrasing she gets frustrated and begins to gesture just a little too emphatically and he grabs her wrists and holds them down for an instant, panting suddenly as he meets her eyes, flesh on flesh for the first time since…it, and she is breathing heavily too and he can see her pulse leap. She avoids his phrase like the plague for a moment, then he is pulling her against him and letting his body say what his mouth cannot for the moment, and she as ever is unresisting as she falls into him.

She nestles her body against his so far as the airplane seats will allow and lets one hand drift over his chest before her eyes flutter closed. He continues to watch her breathe long after she falls asleep, contemplating life, love and the pursuit of happiness…contemplating her. She wakes up in the night to find him staring at her, but quickly closes her eyes before he can know that she knows. When the plane lands and the other young women start to blink and rub their eyes, he reluctantly guides her shoulders up to a sitting position on her own side of the divider between them, but not before squeezing her hand beneath the blanket they now share--hard--and she knows that what he really means to say is ‘I will be waiting for you.’

She turns her head swiftly and smiles at him broadly, letting her expression convey all the gratitude in the world. For just the barest moment, he smiles back and lets her know he understands.

Amidst all the chaos Worlds has to offer, when she hops off the mat after beam and he is waiting for her with arms outstretched like in his mind he’s hugging her in the way that he does which the NGO would surely find inappropriate, the way she most wants to be hugged by him right then, that smile is back on his face.

What she cannot see in her gloriously gorgeous glee is that her father in the stands has just turned to her mother and said seriously, it seems we have a problem on our hands--and that her mother has just agreed.

Seven.

Payson pushes herself onto the beam, and Sasha is lost to her.

Summer can see it all happening as though she is spiraling forwards in time. Payson will grow up a little more over the past few years, while Sasha chases Summer and whomever else gets close enough to him to provide an adequate distraction, right up until the Olympics--after which point, he will no longer be Payson’s coach and the need for such distractions will be gone. Summer will too.

Sasha does not belong to Payson yet, she thinks with a sort of fierce self-congratulations…but it does not matter, not really, because he will. One day, Sasha will go to the ends of the Earth for that woman.

Summer is not the kind of person to wait around for time to take what was never hers in the first place.

She clutches tighter to Steve’s arm beside her, digging holes into the fabric of his jacket with her nails.

He looks over at her and smiles, no doubt wondering whether her newfound clinginess signals the prelude to the sort of sexual encounter he has no doubt been dreaming about experiencing with her for years now.

She leans her head against his shoulder and grins at Sasha’s frown, although she knows that his glance over at her is proprietary at best and a show put on for the other Rock Moms at worst.

Summer wonders with barely a hint of surprise when she began considering herself a “Rock Mom.”

She does not however wonder when she lost the blond man who has turned around in the five seconds it took her to complete that thought, because she can see now that he was never really hers to begin with.

Summer makes sure not to let Steve go when she stands up, shooting Chloe a GLARE when the other woman begins making eyes at the only man Summer has left to consider her own.

Summer knows she had better hold tight to what she has left; otherwise, she risks winding up with nothing at all.

.
he said to her once a very long time ago, running a proprietory hand over her flank while she stood shivering in the cold she remembered in the nearness of him that she felt all the time without him.
kissed him and although he doesn’t much seem to care one way or another occasionally she remembers this fact when she sees him watching her with hooded eyes from across the gym and she cringes.

 
 
 
Title: Images of Broken Light
Author: issuegirls
Fandom: Make It or Break It
Pairing: Payson/Sasha
Rating: M
Summary: you know that his not loving you doesn’t mean he doesn’t want you.
Notes: Oh, God. This really wasn’t what I’d intended to write at all, especially as I should be packing right now because I leave to go on holiday on Wednesday… and yet. Here it is. And it’s so… dark. I can honestly say I haven’t written anything like it before. Um, sorry? *g*

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Title: When Your Heart Wear Thin
Author: Kaelynsue
Pairing: Payson/Sasha
Rating: T
Summary: Payson's life is in shambles, and Sasha is there to pick up the pieces.

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Title: Like Endless Rain
Author: issuegirls
Fandom: Make It or Break It
Pairing: Payson/Sasha
Rating: T
Summary: The air thickens until she can barely breathe from the weight of it…
Notes: Written, for the most part, just to see if I could actually still write something (vaguely) coherent.
Notes II: If you get the title reference, I will give you a virtual cookie.

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01 April 2011 @ 01:10 am
Мы пошли по тому же пути, что и Вы сразу - дать как можно информации о товаре. Но скажу очевивидную вещь, да, - клиент будет ходить к Вам за информацией, но это не значит, что он будет покупать у Вас. Он, получив всю инфу, пойдет забьет в поиск нужную вещь и будет искать, где дешевле ее купить. Как и любой человек, как и мы с вами, да? Это не значит, что этого не надо делать, пусть клиент ходит и, может, он чего-нибудь да и купит когда-нибудь. Но не это дает покупателей, это только одна составляющая и не самая главная. Главная - это удобство получения товара и цена. 
 
 
 
Title: "The Beginning of a Beautiful Friendship"
Author: jennycarolyn (or jci if you know me from ff.net)
Fandom: Make It or Break It
Rating/Classification: PG Paystin Friendship
Disclaimer: I don't own these characters and am making no profit from their use.
Summary: If Austin Tucker wasn't the definition of everything she despised, pretending to be one thing while he was in fact another, she might actually like the guy. They might even be friends. A redux of Season 2, Ep.2: "All or Nothing"
Word Count: 4,491


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Title: "Obvious"
Fandom: Make It or Break It
Rating/Classification: R, Sasha/Payson, smut, you've been warned...
Disclaimer: I don't own these characters and am making no profit from their use.
Summary: 2,166 words. Written for Porn Battle XI and the prompt "obvious" Payson supposed it should have been more obvious to her, but it wasn't.


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15 January 2011 @ 02:16 pm
Title: Team Drama
Author: amathela
Characters: Ensemble
Word Count: 5990
Rating: PG
Summary: It's war between the Rock girls and Ellen Beals. Spoilers up to episode 2:10 - At The Edge Of The Worlds.

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15 December 2010 @ 02:47 am
Title: As a Surprise
Pairing
: Austin/Emily
Characters: Austin Tucker, Emily Kmetko
Summary: It came as a surprise because one moment we were laughing and one moment we were sealed
Words: 550
Warnings: OneShot
A/N: Unbetareaded

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03 December 2010 @ 09:33 am
My first MIOBI Fanfic. Enjoy.

Title: For You...The World

Pairing: Payson/Sasha

Rating: PG-13

Summary: Sasha would do anything for Payson, including leave.

Okay, so I'm not sure how to link to my page (I have taken long hiatuses for LJ and haven't played around enough) so just click my name or whatever to the to it if the link I post below doesn't work.

http://kaelynsue.livejournal.com/7129.html
 
 
 
30 November 2010 @ 09:43 pm

Title: First Correspondence
Authorsimply_aly 
Fandom: Make It or Break It
Pairing/Characters: Sasha/Payson
Rating: PG
Word Count: 400
Summary: He almost writes back.
Author’s Note: Companion to Last Correspondence

He almost writes back...


 
 
 
28 November 2010 @ 08:49 pm
Title: Lost and Found

Fandom: Make it or Break it (obviously)

Rating: PG-13

Characters/Pairing: Sasha and Payson

Status: Almost done...promise...

Summary: Sasha Belov thought he was doing the right thing by leaving the Rock behind. Payson Keeler doesn't agree. A story of a coach and his athlete.

Spoilers: Up to and through "At the Edge of Worlds" aka the mid-season finale.

Linkage: Lost and Found
 
 
 
word count: 2,851
rating: pg-13
spoilers/summary: Kind of a re-write of I Won't Dance, Don't Ask Me. Not kind of, exactly that.

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16 November 2010 @ 10:08 pm


Title:  Last Correspondence
Author:  simply_aly
Fandom:  Make It Or Break It
Pairing/Characters:  Sasha/Payson
Rating:  PG
Word Count:  261
Summary:  She writes him letters.
A/N:  For snoozin81 's prompt in the Doomed Ships Comment Ficathon.

She writes him letters...

 
 
 
Title: The No Touching Rule
Author: amathela
Pairing/Character: Ensemble (Sasha/Payson, some background pairings)
Word Count: 8495
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Summer wants to teach the girls about abstinence. Lauren wants Summer to marry her dad, Kaylie wants Austin to leave her alone, Payson wants to forget she ever kissed her coach, and Sasha just wants his gym back. (And Payson, maybe.) Spoilers up to episode 2:8 - Rock Bottom.

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20 July 2010 @ 11:24 am
Title; Girls In the Video
Fandom; Make It or Break It
Pairing/Character(s); Sasha/Summer
Rating; K+
Word Count; 263
Spoilers; NONE
Summary; Drabble prompt at {prompterr }: Prompt # 156: Makeover

Makeover )

Title; It's Okay to Admit
Fandom; Make It or Break It
Pairing/Character(s); Sasha/Summer
Rating; K+
Word Count; 188
Spoilers; Missing Scene from Season 2, Episode 1: "Friends Close, Enemies Closer."
Summary; Prompt: Missing Scene

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10 February 2010 @ 11:49 pm
Title: Enough is Enough
Author: Jourdana Standish
Fandom: Make It or Break It
Summary: When Lauren corners Steve about his relationship with Chloe in front of everyone, he's had enough and they have it out.
Author's Notes: Lauren has really bugged me in a lot of ways since the beginning of the series. She's manipulative, spoiled and a downright whiny, drama queen who can't stand to have anything not go her way. At first, I thought Steve was a major jerk, but as with the things Tony Starke can do, he's made me enjoy the character. Especially since the character has started to grow from who he first started out.
Spoilers: Episode 16: "Save the Last Dance" and speculations on a particular preview for Episode 17. There is also another Author's Note at the end.

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29 January 2010 @ 05:45 pm
Author: iridescentglow
Title: It never rains in LA
Pairing: Damon/Emily
Rating: R
Word count: 1,834
Note: Written for the Porn Battle IX. Prompt: Damon/Emily, missing you.

Summary: (Missing scene for #1.13, 'California Girls'.) "Damon," Emily said, "we made out in the meat locker at the Pizza Shack. We made out in the parking lot behind the Pizza Shack, until that hobo kept staring at us. We made out on the couch at my house, for like five minutes, until my mom came to check on us. This? Is already the best place we've ever made out."

( It never rains in LA )
 
 
 
27 December 2009 @ 08:46 pm
Author: iridescentglow
Title: Breaking and Entering
Pairing: Emily/Sasha
Rating: NC-17
Spoilers: #1.10, 'All That Glitters'
Word count: 7,924

Summary: Emily continues to train at the Rock after hours – and finds she's not the only one.

Warnings: Obviously, Emily is 16 and Sasha is really, really not. This fic also includes dominance/submission. However, I have tried to handle the subject matter sensitively, while minimizing the dubcon aspects inherent to the pairing. Nonetheless, please proceed with caution, especially if you find masochism triggering.

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26 December 2009 @ 02:46 pm
As you might know, the yuletide fic exchange went live yesterday, and there is a grand total of ONE Make It Or Break It fic included. *trumpet... trumpet dying* I realize I am biased, since it was written at my specification, but I think it's great:

Fic rec: Three Finger Hook and Loop by anonymous (Damon/Razor/Emily, R)
The Bro Code is all well and good, but Razor doesn't know a single guy who's actually going to give up a girl like Emily just because his buddy's into her.

Comment at AO3 to let the author know what you think. :)
 
 
 
25 October 2009 @ 09:30 am
Title: "Rules", "Coaching", "Complete", "Forbidden"
Author: dunderklumpen
Fandom: Make it or Break it
Pairing: Sasha/Emily and one gen
Rating: PG - NC-17
Word Count: All together ca. 900 words.
Summary: Four really short snippets about Make it or Break it and the pairing Sasha/Emily. "Coaching" is about Sasha's thoughts after he met the girls in he hallway. "Complete" is about Emily's thoughts when Sasha put his hand on her neck to encourage her (scene in my icon). Both scenes are from episode 110 "All that glitters". The rest isn't directly related to a special episode.
Disclaimer: Make it or Break it is the property of ABC Family.
Beta:
Thanks to luthien82 and foreverbm who helped.
A/N: I'm open to all constructive criticism because I'm not a native speaker.

x-posted to makeit_breakit

She felt his hand on her neck.
 
 
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